Two things that bugged me, the first is the drums, I didnt dig the compression all that much, would have been better if you sped up the release or compressed the cymbals separately from the rest of the kit. The other thing was the lack of spacialization. It kind of makes sence for there to be a lack of panning effects since VG music back then was mono, but it would have been nice to get some spread.
You got skills though man so keep going :D
Thanks :)
Looking at the other remixes out there...
I just uploaded my version of the song of storms, so i decided to look at the other remixes on newgrounds... Its a hard call saying which one of ours is better... Taking pygmalionism (the love of one's own art) into account, your'se is probably better, though I'd love it if you gave mine a look.. ^^''
Now for the review. I really like the piano part, how it was layered and had the reverse effect, though at some point the different lines became hard to distinguish (around 1:00). This is an easy trap to fall in if your used to hearing all the parts separately in your head, but it could use some more effects, maybe a low pass filter to make the harmony less punchy, so the melody sticks out. On the contrary, the harmony at 2:48 was a little hard to make out, i could only pick out some of the notes, maybe try raising the whole line up an octave? just an idea.
I hope this helps :D
The intro is flawless in the sense of creating chaos with a piano. You're not really supposed to be able to tell the difference between the notes, however they all blend and real parts of the song.
I have listened to your song and have left a review. I don't mean to be bias whatsoever but I believe my track is better than yours.
A fine start
The only thing i found overtly wrong is the drums sounded pretty thin. Sounds like you recorded a live set and then looped it, which is fine, but it also sounds like you used only one mic on the entire set. Specifically, the hi-hat is by far the loudest part of the set, but musically the least important, and the bass and snare needed more in the low end. The guitar(s) sounded really great though, I'm guessing you used a DI? The only other thing i can think of is the song is really short but that kind of thing is really up to the artist.
I'm learning a big manual and the intricasies of the machine at the same time learning guitars..lol
Also I compiled the guitars, drums and bass without setting the correct volumes...
It's lots of fun and I love the challenge but I need to find more stuff on this recorder..lol
Thanks for the critique...
Much appreciated..JQ
If there is an accompanyment
I don't hear it. Sounds like one note being played by one instrument quietly on the up-beats. At 0:04 you could at least drop it 5 letter names and get yourself a good ol' IVI (151) chord progression. As for the rest, the bass drum and melody dominated the mix, bring those down, except where the melody's filter brings it down low for you by cutting the high freq.s
K thanks man :)
Alright the first track is done...
Now you just record/write the rest of 'em.
lol yea I think I may do a few more openings. I dont write them down because i just keep playing the tune in my head and hit the keys I think work best. Thanks for your review :)
Lifting the pedal
I think you should lift the pedal more at 0:28. I would do it once for each beat (if its going at ~120). I don't like the dissonance of those 16th notes ringing out through that whole passage. The same goes for the other sections where you use that 8th16th16th pattern. I dunno, maybe I'm too picky because I'm used to having all the piano music I hear being written by Mozart or Bach. I would write more but I'm actually procrastinating and I should really get back to work...
Will keep that in mind, thanks!
Great song!
I could see this used as part of a video game. There was a problem with the synth that comes in at 1:22 Not that its too loud, but when it plays the bass on the deep synth and the lower freqs of the bass drum, most of the hi-hats, and the main melody disappear momentarily. Other than that, good choice of unconventional synths and... is that a pentatonic scale I hear? makes this song pretty original, good job!
Cheers mate, thanks for the heads up, hadn't realised that. Sometimes have that problem when i have a big range like this. And yes i think it might be, gald you like it, thanks :) x
repeditive...
after about 2 min i was left wondering why the music was repeating. It wasn't, it was just really long. I was almost expecting "oh its 9000 miles, back to you" to come out of no where and change everything :3 *refferance to the song 9000 miles by Pendulum* but nope, its just the same 4-beat loop over and over with super minor changes in between. If this was a 1-2 minute loop then it definately would have gotten a higher score. The mixing was pretty good, strings were loud, but they were marked accents so it makes sence that they were. If you were to use them as a melody they would be loud but u didnt so its all good. The ending came out of no where, you could have had the strings end it with some 2-beat, conclusive-sounding, thing.
Danke :). This was the second song I created (hence the name second run) in about 2-3 hours. It originally was a 1-2 minute loop, but I got tired of having to hit play again on my player so I decided to just copied everything and pasted it to make it longer. I do admit my biggest problem is repetition but I am trying to work on that. I plan to go back and make this song better sometime in the future, and to be honest this song was made from randomly pushing buttons on my keyboard =P.
fails
0:00-0:10 sounds low rez, spread out those instrument ranges, have high and low, if you put everything in the mid it sounds garbagelike
0:10-0:12 what was that? :O at least it sounded clear
0:12-end quarter notes do not a song make. you mixed it up a bit by adding some other notes but it didn't seem cohesive or logical. this section sounded low rez too
u got 3 stars cuz i didnt turn off my speakers immediatly when it turned on, it sounded like it had some sort of melody in it, and the sound effects at the begining were cool
note the title.
0:00-0:10 my pathetic stand-in for an intro. it's low rez because its 3 stacks rolling up slowly and my computer doesnt exactly agree with it.
0:10-0:12 4 snares and a crash my pathetic stand-in for a drum interruption
0:12-end quarter notes and some other incohesive things? the bint-nuh effect comes from a bass drum thumping at the beginning of every note.
At least you didn't just hit 0 and walk away.
Dude...
from about 1:00 on, id love to hear that as background music for a game. Like a RPG's open world theme or the theme of a town (wont really work for a battle theme, though, lol)
lol right! That would be amazing. If I ever get asked, i could always make a version without the beginning. Thanks!! ^_^
I like making music as a pastime. I tried to make flash once, but i learned i suck at flash the hard way. :P I always put somewhere over infinate effort into making my music and would just like to have some people recognize it :)
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